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不久前看完了《原力觉醒》小说版，个人认为这的确是自《新希望》以来，小说和电影内容差别最大的一部星战电影同名小说。
小说与电影最终放映版最大的不同，有两方面：一方面是人物塑造，另一方面是设定。
在人物塑造方面，两个差异最大的人物是蕾伊和伦。从小说的到电影版的改动，可谓非常大，几乎把人物性格完全改变，但其实这种巨大的改变到也在情理之中。因为这是两个贯穿整个故事的最主要的角色，而且又是新角色，《原力觉醒》将奠定他们的个性基调。
蕾伊
在小说中蕾伊是一个颇有些自私的人，这对于一个生活在艰苦荒漠中的拾荒者来说，倒也并非不合情理。
其中一个例子是，她差一点把BB-8卖给昂卡，甚至已经把BB-8关掉，唯一导致她反悔的原因是，她想恶心一下昂卡。她意识到昂卡极度渴望得到BB-8之后，故意偏不把BB-8给他，这个理由反映了蕾伊损人不利己的“叛逆”心理。但显然损害了蕾伊作为新一代绝地好苗苗的光辉形象，于是这段黑历史在最终电影剧本中被果断删除。
另一个事件是，当汉与瓜维亚死亡帮对峙时，她向芬恩提出他们应该赶紧逃到千年隼号上去。芬恩犹豫了，说汉警告过他们“不要打千年隼的主意”，蕾伊反驳说：汉与瓜维亚死亡帮的对峙凶多吉少，说不定什么时候就会火拼起来，他们躲在飞船甲板下迟早会被抓住，因此应该赶紧自寻出路。这的确是非常合理的推断，不过就这么打算丢下汉·索罗不管了？再次偷走千年隼并把船主人丢给杀气腾腾的黑帮？实在是有点白眼狼啊。在小说中，蕾伊自己碰掉了一根老朽的零件，引起了黑帮的警觉，不得不在逃跑途中想办法阻拦黑帮，这才想到启动紧急程序关闭船舱内的所有防爆门。
凯洛·伦
凯洛·伦在电影中是个寡言少语的中二少年，在小说里则是个话痨，见人就兜售他的政治理念。
设定方面，最明显的区别，是对弑星者基地武器发射原理的描写。其次恐怕是对蕾伊身世的一些隐晦的暗示。
弑星者基地的工作原理
小说中是弑星者基地利用太阳的能量，收集宇宙中的暗能量，储存在行星内部，靠行星自身磁场，加上振荡器，让暗能量保持稳定。向目标发射时，暗能量转化为幻能量，当幻能量抵达目标星系时，外观是一个发光的能量球，它击中霍斯尼亚主行星，将之引爆成一颗袖珍新星，其产生的热量继而摧毁了霍斯尼亚星系里的其他行星表面的一切生物和建筑，以及星系内的数百艘共和国战舰。
这一原理南方战士早已撰文进行了详细描述，参见“弑星者基地原理概述”：www.starwarschina.com/portal.php?mod=view&aid=794
蕾伊的身世
关于蕾伊的身世，小说中有一些更多的线索。首先是蕾伊在塔克达纳的幻视，与电影不同，包含了更多的场景和人物；其次是在故事后半段，凯洛·伦和斯诺克都渐渐猜出了蕾伊的真实身份，也就是说，他们都知道蕾伊过去的历史。
除此以外，小说中也因为写作仓促、电影同步修改剪辑，导致有多处小纰漏，而且与《觉醒之前》（Before the Awakening）小说有无法衔接的矛盾。
不过对铁杆星战迷来说，为了电影里没有的一堆爆料，这本小说绝对值得一看。
以下摘录小说与电影之间存在差异的一些具体片段。
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Then Ren resumed his pace, deep in thought as he strode toward the shuttle. In the course of returning to his ship he passed a blaster lying on the ground. It was Poe’s, the one that had come within an arm’s length of killing him. Once he was beyond its reach he touched it—but not with his hands. It rose, seemingly of its own accord, and flew free, smashing into a nearby structure and scaring the wits out of an idling stormtrooper unfortunate enough to be standing nearby.
伦登机离开贾库前，砸碎了波掉在地上的爆能枪，这显得有些莫名其妙。电影里改成了释放之前被定住的等离子爆能束。
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The trooper’s words came low and fast. “Listen carefully and pay attention. You do exactly as I say, I can get you out of here.”
Within Poe’s wounded brain something like cognizance stirred. He turned and gawked at the trooper’s mask.“If…what? Who are you?”
小说遭到多次反复修改的一个小证据。芬恩的话里并没有if，但是波重复的时候说了if。估计是前一稿台词是“If you do exactly as I say, I can get you out of here”，后来删掉了if，但是忘记对波的回话进行相应的改动。
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The trooper spoke while staring nervously down the corridor. “Because it’s the right thing to do.”
Poe shook his head, not buying it for a second. “Buddy, if we’re gonna do this, we have to be honest with each other.”
The trooper stared at him for a long moment. “I need a pilot.”
Poe nodded. A wide grin broke across his face. “Well, you just got me.”
FN-2187 was taken aback by Poe’s quick agreement. “Yeah?”
电影中波直接猜到了芬恩的意图，增加了喜剧性。
电影字幕对“Yeah?”的翻译有偏差。芬恩的反应是不敢相信他居然这么轻易就答应了，“真的吗？”而不是“好啊”。
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“This thing really moves.” He shook his head in admiration. Fine engineering knew no politics. “I’m not going to waste this chance: I owe some people in that ship a little payback. We’ll take out as many weapons systems as we can.”
The trooper had expected to run as far and as fast as the TIE fighter would take them. “Shouldn’t we go for lightspeed as soon as we can?”
A tight, humorless grin crossed Poe’s face. “Someone on that ship called me the best pilot in the Resistance. I wouldn’t want to disappoint him. Don’t you worry. I’ll get us in position. Just stay sharp and follow my lead.” He paused only briefly. “How about this? Every time you see the destroyer, you shoot at it.”
无脑大兵波驾机从“定局者”号歼星舰逃跑后掉头，开始賭气似地袭击歼星舰。
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A very slight shudder ran through the deck. Mitaka’s voice was even, but Hux could tell that the dark-haired lieutenant was shaken by what he was seeing. “They’ve taken out an entire bank of defensive weaponry. And they continue to attack. They’re not running.”
Hux didn’t understand. It was beyond comprehension. Prisoners ran from prisons, they didn’t stick around to assault their jailers. The action smacked of an unshakeable wish to commit suicide.
这种鲁莽愚蠢的行为，连赫克斯也看不懂了。
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"Destroyed?” The tech’s response as he studied his instruments confirmed the general’s circumspection. “Disabled only, it would appear.”
Hux leaned closer. “He could be trying to throw us off.”
“If so,” the tech reported, “he’s going to grave extremes. Sensors show pieces of the fighter are becoming detached and flying off. Such actions could not be carried out by the operator of the fighter itself and must be the result of the craft having suffered serious damage."
小说中FO军官说话啰嗦，不像电影中那样精明强干。
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When he thought about it, Hux mused, the fact that FN-2187 came across as mind-numbingly ordinary was more unsettling than if his history had been full of semi-traitorous rants and near psychotic episodes. It suggested that the ranks might harbor others like him. They could not be permitted to know what he had done. Psytechs were already hard at work counseling those who had come into contact with him, whether through unremarkable everyday interaction or in the course of his violent flight. The whole incident had to be tamped down, obscured, and buried lest the germ of an infection spread through the ranks.
因为芬恩的叛逃，赫克斯暗暗对自己的训练方法感到疑虑。
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“Nothing noteworthy,” Phasma said. “FN-2187 was assigned to my division, received some additional specialty training, was evaluated, and sent to reconditioning.”
Hux shook his head slowly as he continued to scrutinize the records. If anything stood out in the history of stormtrooper FN-2187, it was his exceptional banality. “No prior signs of nonconformity. Not so much as talking back to a superior. He appears so ordinary as to be invisible.”
“This was his first offense.” Phasma betrayed nothing other than professional interest in the episode or in the man. “It is his only offense.”
这段情节与《原力觉醒》前传小说《觉醒之前》（Before The Awakening）有明显矛盾。《觉醒之前》中芬恩已经有过违抗法斯马命令的时候，但法斯马很器重芬恩。此处硬要解释只能说法斯马在替芬恩撒谎，也在为她自己撒谎。
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“The Supreme Leader made it explicit that the Resistance not acquire the map to Skywalker. Capture the droid if we can. Destroy it if we must.”
Ren paused to consider the general’s words. “A simple enough task, or so it would seem. Find one droid. Just how capable are your soldiers, General?”
Hux turned away from the trooper’s holofile. He respected Ren and his abilities, but he was not afraid of him. One did not rise to the rank of general in the forces of the First Order by showing fear.
电影删略了凯洛·伦的若干台词。赫克斯想干脆摧毁机器人，省得麻烦，而凯洛·伦想活捉它，在这一点上，两人起了矛盾。凯洛·伦虽然在斯诺克手下效力，但他的私心表露无遗。
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“I won’t have you questioning my methods.”
“What methods would those be, General? Those that allow a single common trooper to free an important prisoner from confinement, escort him to an operating hangar, and assist him in fighting his way to freedom? What methods teach such expertise? Obviously, at least some of your troops are skilled athigh treason. Perhaps Leader Snoke shouldconsider using an army of clones.”
又一例凯洛·伦的滔滔不绝。电影里的凯洛·伦少言寡语、心狠手辣。
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Hux held his ground. “My duty is to fight for the First Order with every iota of information, every scrap of material, and every functioning trooper at my command. That was in the oath I took. That is the oath I have sworn to uphold.” His gaze did not flinch from the mask. “There was nothing in it about accommodating the ancillary interests of individuals, no matter how high their rankor how exalted their perceived importance. Careful, Ren, that your personal interests do not interfere with direct orders from Leader Snoke.”
小说中赫克斯用了冠冕堂皇地用一套大道理来解释自己对凯洛·伦的不满。
iota，赫克斯这个文绉绉的逼装得真好，老年作者选词实在颇有古风。
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Rey pursed her lips. “You may be great behind the guns of a TIE fighter, but your hand-to-hand skills need a lot of work.”
He slumped slightly. “I’m out of practice.”
所以芬恩会输给FN2199。（强行填坑：在《觉醒之前》的新兵训练营里FN2199曾单兵格斗中败给芬恩。）
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Changing direction, they raced for the other craft. Though it was partially covered by several protective sand tarps, the loading ramp was down. Finn paused only briefly to glance at the ident plate sealed flush inside the airlock wall.
“Mi con,” he read aloud. “What the hell does that mean?” Ahead of him, Rey yelled without looking back.
“Some con man’s private craft, probably. That might be a good thing. It might be built to travel faster than a crippled skimmer!"
一个电影里难以表达的梗。千年隼（Millenium Falcon）的船名标牌掉漆变成了Mi con。蕾伊说也许因为船长是个大骗子（con man）。她不幸言中，船长汉的确是个大骗子。不过这个梗仔细想想并不是太好笑。
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“That was some piloting!”
“Thanks.” She shrugged. “I’ve been flying every kind of junk you can imagine almost since I could walk.” It was her turn to smile. “Speaking of which, that was some shooting! I was worried you wouldn’t have time to react.”
一个有趣的细节。蕾伊说她能走路的时候就飞过各种乱七八糟的飞船。如果把这当作一个严谨事实，我们会发现这意味着“父母”离开她之前，她就在驾驶各种垃圾飞船了，这意味着父母离开前，她们已经在贾库生活了一段时间（而且很可能一直在为昂卡工作，这与父母离开前把她托付给垃圾回收商昂卡的情节是一致的，因为父母不可能把女儿托付给一个完全陌生的人）。
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“It was perfect!” Rey told him. It was silent in the lounge for a long moment before he murmured, “Why are we…”
"Staring at each other? I don’t know…”
The need for possibly uncomfortable answers was obviated by a series of insistent beeps from BB-8, who had rolled in to join them. Rey knelt beside the agitated droid.
“Hey, calm down! You’re okay, we’re all okay. For the moment, at least ."
电影中蕾伊和芬恩在激动地庆祝之后，蕾伊一转身就平静地对BB-8说你没事了，大气都没有喘一下。此处情绪转折十分突兀。看到小说就很好理解，在中间两人经历了一段短暂的尴尬。显然电影把这段拍摄后删除了，但是剪辑的时候显然没有意识到这样一来，蕾伊的情绪转折有点大，或者说剪辑时已经太晚，没有时间补拍了。（在蓝光版中似乎对此处做了过渡性修改）
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She tried to see while simultaneously shielding her eyes. “I don’t know. Just hope it’s not the motivator. Ship of this age and class is bound to have one.” Sitting down, she slid both legs into the opening.
蕾伊居然说千年隼这种船龄的飞船一定有超空间驱动发动器（注意不是发动机，发动器只是超空间引擎的一个组件），言外之意是部分现代的飞船已经不需要超空间驱动发动器了？！星战宇宙的科技终于进步了吗？
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“Something to report, Lieutenant? Or have you come, like myself, to marvel at the view?”
“Sir?”
A gloved hand rose to take in the sweep of light and energy arrayed before them. “Look at it, Lieutenant. So much beauty among so much turmoil. In a way,we are but an infinitely smaller reflection of the same conflict. It is the task of the First Order to remove the disorder from our own existence, so that civilization maybe returned to the stability that promotes progress. A stability that existed under the Empire, was reduce to anarchy by the Rebellion, was inherited in turn by the so-called Republic, and will be restored by us. Future historians will look upon this as the time when a strong hand brought the rule of law back to civilization.”
Mitaka forbore mentioning that the Republics had developed their own codes of law.
凯洛·伦努力扮演着一个有思想的中二领袖，在听米塔卡汇报前，居然有心思发表一段银河系政治的长篇大论，连米塔卡都差点忍不住要开启嘲讽模式了…（电影中凯洛·伦被简化成了没有思想的中二领袖，很难说是好是坏…）
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“Two TIE fighters accompanied the recovery party. Contact has been lost with both and it is assumed…it is assumed they encountered unforeseen difficulties.”
Ren sneered softly. “You equivocate like a senator. Go on.”
“Reports from our troopers on the ground indicate that the droid escaped capture by taking flight aboard a stolen Corellian freighter, a YT model. An older craft but in the hands of a competent pilot, a capable one.”
Atypically, a touch of uncertainty colored Ren’s response. “The droid stole a freighter?”
“Not exactly, sir. Again, according to these preliminary reports, it had help.” Mitaka was starting to sweat. “We have no confirmation, but brief glimpses by our troopers correlated with the location of an earlier crash site lead us to believe that trooper FN-2187 may have been—”
电影中米塔卡是个可怜的少年，在小说里是个汇报起来啰啰嗦嗦的笨蛋，看他说话累得读者都想砍人了，活该他被锁喉。结果电影删节了米塔卡的台词，反而把凯洛·伦黑成了神经病。
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“Told ya we should’ve double-checked the Western Reaches! Just lucky we were in the general vicinity when the ship powered up and its beacon snapped on.”
电影中始终没细说汉是怎么找到千年隼的，只在玛兹城堡前汉提到千年隼是一艘有很多违法记录的脏船，暗示他通过某些监控系统或线索找到了千年隼。小说里明确指出是他们运气好，在贾库所在星系转悠，刚好收到千年隼启动的信号。
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Rey considered. “If they found Han and Chewbacca this quickly inside a ship this big, that suggests they’ve got at least short-range life-form detectors. Which means if one of them starts wondering about the possible existence of other crew members, they might find us.” She looked around. “We’ll be safe enough here because we’re close to one of the rathtars, but if they start parsing readouts, they’ll separate us out from the cargo.” She nodded up the service crawl space. “I’m not gonna sit here and wait to be pried out like a mithuk in a burrow. The Falcon is this direction.” She started moving.
Finn hesitated. “Han specifically said not to think about taking the Falcon.” She looked back at him. “He’s talking to a Guavian Death Gang. It’s not inconceivable that polite conversation might turn into uncontrolled blaster fire. If that happens and Han is on the losing end, I’d like to have a chance to avoid the consequences. Like maybe being fed to the rathtars. Coming?”
腹黑蕾伊不顾芬恩的质疑，打算丢下汉和丘巴卡自己逃跑。符合沙漠生存者的处世哲学，但是不符合绝地红二代应有的政治觉悟，电影删掉了这一段。
另外在小说中，蕾伊远程操纵门锁的办法不是reset blast door fuses，而是通过reset flowtronics来redirect the flow。这里的flow是个更抽象的设定，可能因为不好理解，所以最终被替换成了fuse（保险丝）。
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“From inside the hangar? Is that even possible?” He was wholly at one with the Falcon now, focused intently on the instrumentation. “I never answer that question until after I’ve done it.”
电影里改成了I never ASK that question until I’ve done it.
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“If they get to Luke first, we don’t have a chance,” she murmured. A new thought forced her to ask, “Anything else?Anything I’m not seeing here? What about Poe Dameron?”
“They found his X-wing destroyed. Angle and depth of the blaster marks suggest it was blown up while still on the ground. Definitely First Order: The locals don’t have access to that kind of weaponry.” His expression tightened. “There’s no indication he survived. It looks like we’ve lost him.”
Leia’s expression tightened. If they continued to lose fighters like Dameron, the Resistance would have no hope against the First Order. She forced herself to continue reading through the other half of the detailed report. “There’s no mention of Beebee-Ate.”
这个片段在剪辑阶段被删。抵抗组织继承了人品王欧比-旺·克诺比仅仅通过爆能束枪痕就能判断袭击者是敌人的优良传统。
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“You need to go to the Senate right away. Tell them I insist that they take action against the First Order. The longer they bicker and delay, the stronger the Order becomes.” She leaned toward the other woman. “If they fail to take action soon, the Order will have grown so strong the Senate will be unable to do anything. It won’t matter what they think.”
Sella indicated her understanding. “With all respect: Do you think the senators will listen?”
“I don’t know.” Leia bit down on her lower lip. “So much time has passed.There was a time when they were at least willing to listen. And of course, the Senate’s makeup has changed. Some of those who were always willing to pay attention to me have retired. Some of those who have replaced them have their own agendas.” She smiled ruefully. “Not all senators think I’m crazy. Or maybe they do. I don’t care what they think about me as long as they take action.”
这段比电影删节片段里出现的内容更多。看来小说成书在电影开始剪辑之后，但在最终剪辑完成之前。
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The emissary nodded. “I’ll do all I can to ensure the Resistance gets the hearing we deserve. But why don’t you go yourself, General? An appeal of this nature is always more effective when delivered firsthand.” Leia’s smile thinned. “I might make it to the Senate, yes. I might even be able to deliver my speech. But I would never, never get out of the Hosnian system alive. I would have a terrible ‘accident,’ or become the victim of some ‘deranged’ radical. Or I would eat something that didn’t agree with me. Or encounter someone who didn’t agree with me.”
从侧面反映了FO对新共和国的渗透已经极其严重，或者共和国内部政治斗争已经凶残到行凶刺杀的地步。这段未出现在电影中。
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“How can I have committed such a devastating oversight?” the protocol droid continued. “When we sent Beebee-Ate off,it was my responsibility to perform his final checkout. Which I did, in most excellent and approved fashion. Except—except…” If a droid could have fallen to wailing, C-PO3 would have done so on the spot. “I forgot to activate his long-range tracking mode! I must have assumed he would always be in the presence of that pilot and that therefore there would be no need. I deserve to have my memory wiped. Oh, Artoo, what am I to do? I wish you’d finally wake up, I need you now.”
电影删节片段。C-3PO忘记打开BB-8的定位系统了，所以没法找到它，又不敢告诉莱娅。
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Seated on the raised platform that was the focus of the chamber was the blue-tinted holo of Supreme Leader Snoke. Tall and gaunt, he was humanoid but not human. The hood of the dark robe he wore was down, leaving visible a pink, pale face so aged it verged on translucence . Poorly reconstructed, the broken nose added to the asymmetry of the damaged visage. So did the position of the left eye,which was situated lower than the right. Beneath wispy gray eyebrows, they were a startling cobalt blue. Long since healed over, old cuts and wounds marred the chin and forehead, the latter scar being particularly noteworthy.
对斯诺克外貌描写与电影略有差异。
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“I do have a proposition. The weapon. We have it. It is ready. I believe the time has come to use it.”
“Against?”
“The Republic. Or what its fractious proponents choose to call the Republic. Their center of government, its entire system. In the chaos that will follow, the Resistance will have no choice but to investigate an attack of such devastating scale. They will throw all their resources into trying to discover its source. So they have no choice but to investigate fully, and in so doing…”
“Reveal themselves.” Snoke was clearly pleased.
“And if they don’t…we’ve destroyed them.”
“Yes,” Snoke said in satisfaction. “Extreme. Audacious. I agree that the timefor such measures has come. Go. Oversee the necessary preparations.”
与电影中袭击新共和国首都的理由完全不同。属于早期设定。可见很多重大设定都是小说完成之后，电影才做了修改，电影弃用了大量原先拍摄的素材并进行了大量补拍。
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Snoke demurred. “It is far more than that. It is where you are from. What you are made of. The dark side—and the light. The finest sculptor cannot fashion a masterpiece from poor materials. He must have something pure, something strong, something unbreakable, with which to work. I have—you.” He paused, reminiscing.
斯诺克向凯洛·伦解释他的重要性。
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“Kylo Ren, I watched the Galactic Empire rise, and then fall. The gullible prattle on about the triumph of truth and justice, of individualism and free will. As if such things were solid and real instead of simple subjective judgments. The historians have it all wrong. It was neither poor strategy nor arrogance that brought down the Empire. You know too well what did.” Ren nodded once. “Sentiment.” “Yes. Such a simple thing. Such a foolish error of judgment. A momentary lapse in an otherwise exemplary life. Had Lord Vader not succumbed to emotion at the crucial moment—had the father killed the son—the Empire would have prevailed.And there would be no threat of Skywalker’s return today.”
斯诺克解释他的哲学。
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He was alive on the surface of Jakku. Alive and alone. There was no way of telling if Finn had been as fortunate. More important, where was BB-8?
The droid could take care of himself,he felt. Poe knew if he could just get offworld and reconnect with the Resistance,a way could be found to recover the droid. All he needed was a ship. He’d already stolen one. Could he steal another?
波在贾库坠机后醒过来，有点脑震荡，思路不清地抛弃芬恩和BB-8，自己跑路了。
（“疯狂的达默龙”后来搭上一个当地拾荒者的车，甩掉了一伙沙漠匪帮的追逐，在一个当地商人的帮助下搭船逃离了贾库-4.11补充。）
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Moving forward and into the three-dimensional representation, he tracked system positions and locator stars. One finger traced the outlines of a particularly bright and well-known nebular cluster. Like everything else in the map, it was brilliantly depicted. It was also only half there.
一个细节：BB-8的地图包含着一个有名的已知星系，并非是完全陌生的星域，所以汉才得以发现地图是不完整的。
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Han put a hand on her shoulder. “Let me know if you change your mind.” Turning, he called toward the ship. “Chewie! Check her out the best you can. With luck, we won’t be here long.”
His gaze returned to the girl standing before him. “You smile too much, Rey.”
Rey nodded obligingly. “I’ll work on it,” she said with a wide smile.
电影中改成了Chewie kind of likes you反映了汉自己对Rey有好感，又不好意思说。
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“To get your droid on a clean ship. Do you think it was luck that Chewie andI found the Falcon? If we can find it on our scanners, the First Order’s not far behind.”
早期字幕中是 we can find it on our radar，小说此处已经与电影晚期字幕修改一致。
电影台词修改的原因可能是避免现实世界的首字母缩略词出现在星战世界中（RADAR原本是个缩略词，完整形式是RAdio Detection And Ranging-4.11补充）。
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“The most important thing here is to keep a low profile, stay under the radar. Maz is a bit of an acquired taste. So let me do the talking. And whatever you do, don’t stare.”
结合上一处修改来看，有点意思，此处小说并没有把radar统一改成scanner（后文还有一处也是radar，未改成scanner）。估计台词修改是统一有一个修改清单发给作者修改的，而电影删除了这句台词，因此没有出现在修改清单中，小说只对应修改清单修改，而不是按照全书radar—>scanner统改，因此漏改了这句话。
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“You still in business?” Han asked her.
“Barely!” she snapped back at the much taller human. “Thanks to a certain mooch who still hasn’t paid me back after nearly twenty years. Can you imagine something so horrible?”
这一段拍摄过，但最终版删除了。有点致敬《帝国反击战》中汉到云城找兰多，见面时兰多吓唬汉的桥段。（EP5）
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“Forgive me. I feel it again. The pull to the light. The Supreme Leader senses it. Show me again the power of the darkness, and I will let nothing stand in our way.”
有意思的是，本集多处出现darkness而不是Dark Side，似乎暗示着原力哲学的一种变迁。
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“The only fight: against the dark side. Through the ages, I’ve seen evil take many forms. The Sith. The Empire. Today, it is the First Order. Their shadow is spreading across the galaxy. We must face them. Fight them. All of us.”
此处 the dark side注意是小写，而不是之前星战作品中通用的首字母大写。
主创似乎借玛兹之口将善恶直接对应为光明和黑暗，而不再是基于原力哲学，说是原力的光明面和黑暗面。
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“Hello, Rey.” She recognized the voice before she even saw the face. Unkar Plutt. There was no mistaking that repulsive countenance. After sparing a quick glance for his oversize minions, she turned her attention to him, astonished. “How—how did you find me?”
He smiled. It did not improve his appearance. “The ship you stole. The Millennium Falcon. You can’t really track a ship while it’s in hyperspace—but when it emerges, and particularly after it sets down somewhere, there are ways. Expensive, but in the case of valuable property, often worth it. Definitely worth it in the case of the Falcon. It happens to be fitted with a covert Imperial homing device. Old technology, but still quite functional. To which my presence here can attest. Didn’t take much to get the necessary relays working.”
删节镜头，在芬恩离开后，昂卡出现拦住蕾伊。并解释了他如何跟踪千年隼到塔科达纳。
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This close in, he could see her expression—but not her hands. Whipping out her new blaster, she plonked it right up against his nose. His underlings started forward, only to be waved off by their master.
Rey growled softly. “I’m seriously thinking about adding another hole to your face.”
He chuckled unpleasantly, then in a single swooping motion grabbed the blaster and wrenched it away from her. Her expression fell. Before he had managed to grab it, she had pulled the trigger—she was certain she had. But for some reason the weapon had malfunctioned.
He shook his head in mock sympathy as he held up the blaster. “You’d need to take off the safety first.” One finger moved toward the almost hidden switch in question. “Here, I’ll show you how. You just flip this little—”
蕾拔枪自卫但是没开保险，于是昂卡夺了枪，嘲笑地指出保险在哪，为后面蕾击毙FO冲锋队时记起开保险做了铺垫。但这个铺垫不是很必要，反而显出汉的缺心少肺，居然明知她不会开保险却没有教会她，所以删了也无妨。（昂卡后来被赶到的丘巴卡卸掉了一只胳膊，最终整段昂卡·普拉特对峙蕾伊的情节都在电影中省略了-4.11补充）
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Maz’s response was somewhat less than helpful. “If it’s so important to her,do as I said before and take it to her yourself. Whether you believe that she wants to see you or not. Han, when you first came to me, your most important decision, involving your most meaningful bonds, was yet to come.”
She shook her head. “I’m surprised, frankly. You were always so good at looking ahead. I think now it’s your time to look back. At what—and who—you’ve left behind.”
玛兹提到了与汉的第一次见面，但不知道她指的most important decision是什么。
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The box was not locked. She opened it.
A heavy, slow, mechanical breathing filled the room. Turning, she found herself looking down an impressive hallway, its architecture reminiscent of the Old Empire. Peering harder, farther, she saw in the distance a section of the famed Cloud City. Two figures were locked in combat, distant, distant. Someone, somewhere, some when, spoke her name.
“Hello?” Wreathed in the irrationality of the moment, she called hopefully, but received no answer.
A boy appeared at the end of the hallway. She started toward him, and the world turned inside out, causing her to trip and fall.
Onto the wall, which had become the ground. Not the adamantine ceramic she had just seen, but dry grass. Nearby, a lightsaber slammed into the ground. A missed thrust, a statement of power—she didn’t know, couldn’t tell. A hand appeared to pull it upward.
Day became night, sky ominous and filled with rain, cold and chilling to the bone. She was standing, she was sitting, she was looking up—to see someone, a warrior, take the full force of the lightsaber. He screamed and fell.
Battlefield then, all around her. Putting a hand to her mouth, she rose and turned. As she turned, she found herself confronted by seven tall, cloaked figures, dark and foreboding, all armed.
Soaked and shivering, she stumbled backward, turning as she half fell. Firelight illuminated her, firelight from a distant, burning temple.
The seven vanished. A sound made her turn, and she blinked in surprise at the sight of a small blue-and-silver R2 unit. A new figure appeared. Falling to his knees, he reached out to the droid with an artifice of an arm—metal and plastics and other materials with which she was not familiar. She blinked and both were gone.
Around her now: barren, snowy woods, the sounds of unknown forest creatures, and a conviction that she must be losing her mind. Once more she climbed to her feet, her chilled breath preceding her. From in front of her, not far away, came the sounds of battle: the cries of the wounded and the clashing of weapons. Then behind her, another voice.
That voice.
“Stay here. I’ll come back for you.”
She whirled, glazed eyes desperately scanning the dark gaps between the slender trees, trying to penetrate the darkness.
“Where are you?” She started running toward the voice.
“I’ll come back, sweetheart. I promise.”
“I’m here! Right here! Where are you?”
No response. She started forward again, running, only to be brought to a sudden halt by a figure appearing without warning from behind a tree.
She screamed, and screamed again, and fell backward, backward, sitting down hard in—
She was in the underground corridor,sitting on the cold old stone, her chest pounding as if she had just run from her home all the way to Niima Outpost.
蕾伊的幻视与电影有较大不同，值得注意。从小说来看，蕾伊的幻视并不是第一视角的，这使我们推测幻视中发生的事情变得非常困难。
蕾伊首先听到了维德的呼吸声，她转身，看到了云城的走廊，远处有两个人影在决斗。
一个男孩出现在走廊尽头（谁？），她向他走去，整个世界开始翻转，她摔倒在地。
云城的墙壁变成了一片干燥的草地，一把光剑插在地上，她不知道是剑士刺偏了，还是一种显示权力的举动（从描述来看，光剑是开着的）。一只手伸过来把光剑拔起。
白天变成黑夜，天空中充满不祥之兆，大雨倾盆，寒冷刺骨。她先是站着，然后坐倒在地，向上看，一名武士被一把光剑刺中，他惨叫着倒下。（电影中有这个镜头，但是看不清楚是谁）
她四周是战场，她站起来，转身要走，面前是七名穿着斗篷、全副武装的高大身影。她仰面摔倒，被火光映红，远处，一座圣殿在燃烧。（看来是凯洛·伦摧毁新绝地武士团圣殿的情景）
七个黑影不见了。她听见一个声音，转头看到一只R2机器人，还有另一个人影。那个人影跪下来，向机器人伸出一只机械手臂。
她眨了眨眼，身边变成一片飞雪中的森林，前面不远处传来战斗的声音，伤员的惨叫和武器撞击的声音（似乎暗示交战双方使用的是光剑，如果这就是电影中弑星者基地外的雪地之战，那说明即使是蕾伊亲自参与的事件，幻视也变成了第三人视角）。
她身后传来一个熟悉的声音：“留在这里，我会回来找你的。”
她向声音的来源跑去，突然树后走出一个人影，她惊恐地向后跌倒，回到了塔克达纳的石板地上。
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“Today is the end! The end of a government incapacitated by corruption! The end of an illegitimate regime that acquiesces to disorder! At this very moment, in a system far from here, the New Republic lives and wheezes, staggeringonward, depraved and ineffectual and unable in any way to support the citizenryit claims to serve. Meanwhile a host of systems are left to wither and die—without aid, without care, without hope. Drowning in its own decadence, the New Republic ignores them, unaware that theseare its final moments.” A hand swept sharply downward.
“This fierce machine which you have built, to which you have dedicated your lives and labor and upon which we now stand, will bring a final end to the worthless Senate and its dithering members. To their cherished fleet. When this day is done, all the remaining systems in their hundreds will bow to the dictates of the First Order. And all will remember this asthe last day of the last Republic!”
赫克斯的讲稿与电影大不相同，可以推测在电影最终版之前还存在若干个简化版本。在电影版中有一处比较明显语气和音调不同的剪接点，似乎演员为修改的讲稿进行了补录音。
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Having been gathered in stages by an immense array of coupled collectors located on the other side of the planet, a tremendously compact volume of a type of dark energy known as quintessence had been accumulated at the center of the planet. Held in place inside a roiling molten metal core by the frozen world’s powerful magnetic field, augmented by the weapons system’s own containment field, it grew until there was nothing like it—nothing natural like it—in this corner of the galaxy. Penetrating to within a predetermined distance of the containment field, an immense hollow cylinder permitted a way out while ensuring that when the weapon was unleashed, gigantic groundquakes would not roil the world’s fragile surface. When the weapons engineers fired the device, a breach was induced in the containment field. At incredible velocity and accelerating exponentially, the concentrated volume of quintessence escaped, transforming as it did so into a state known as phantom energy and following the artificial line of egress that had been provided. Assuming that the rotation and inclination of the planet had been taken into account, the released blast of concentrated phantom energy would travel along a perfectly linear path, punching a small Big Rip through hyperspace itself until it left the galaxy—
—or encountered something in its path that was of sufficient mass to intercept it.
Traveling faster than anything ever generated by artificial means, through a torn portion of space-time whose properties were not fully understood, the concentrated glowing ball of energy lit the night sky above Republic City. Leia’s envoy Korr Sella was among those who gazed uncomprehendingly at the inexplicable phenomenon. Disturbed space was energized and lit up by its passage. It was as if a minuscule sun had suddenly appeared from nowhere, heading directly for the world on which she stood.
It struck with enough force to penetrate the crust and the mantle. Stunned scientists assumed the globe had been hit by an asteroid. The reality was worse, much worse. So powerful was the orb of phantom energy that as it dissipated within the planetary core, it blocked the free flow of elysium. Gravitons that normally moved freely and harmlessly through the planet suddenly were blocked from doing so. Almost immediately, the resulting graviton flux released enough heat to ignite the core…
Turning the planet into what astrophysicists called a pocket nova.
Expanding outward from the explosion, a tremendous burst of heat tore through the Hosnian system’s other worlds, searing their surfaces clean of life and incidentally obliterating all settlements, installations, and outposts, as well as the hundreds of ships belonging to the Republic fleet. In its wake, the detonation left behind a blazing, spherical mass. The home of the Republic had become a new binary system: one utterly devoid of life. —
对弑星者基地运作原理的描写与电影完全不同。
小说中，弑星者基地利用太阳的能量，收集宇宙中的暗能量，储存在行星内部，靠行星自身磁场，加上振荡器，让暗能量保持稳定。
一根巨大、中空的圆柱形管道伸入能量场内部，作为炮管。开炮时，能量场打开一个缺口，使暗能量通过炮口高速涌出，同时转化为幻能量，进入超空间，沿既定射线向目标发射。当幻能量抵达目标星系时，外观是一个发光的能量球，在它通过的轨迹上，空间被能量化，呈现出一条发光的直线。幻能量球击中了霍斯尼亚主行星，穿透了地壳和地幔，幻能量在地核中释放，阻断了原本自由移动的引力子，引力子释放热量引爆了地核，将霍斯尼亚主行星激发成一颗袖珍新星，其产生的热量继而摧毁了霍斯尼亚星系内的其他行星表面的一切生物和建筑，以及星系内的数百艘共和国战舰，最终霍斯尼亚星系变成了一个死寂的双星系统。
（很好奇这么复杂的连锁反应，FO怎么能保证首次发射就一次性成功？弑星者基地如果进行过试射，那按照这个设定，整个银河系都能看到试射过程了，新共和国又怎么可能不知道弑星者基地的存在呢，除非是试射被伪造成一次自然的天文现象……）
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Halting an arm’s length away, he studied her face from behind his mask. When he finally spoke, he sounded at once impressed and surprised. “You would kill me. Knowing nothing about me.”
Finding that her mouth and lips worked, she replied defiantly. “Why wouldn’t I kill you? I know about the First Order.”
“I would say otherwise. But that is a small thing. Simple ignorances are easily remedied.” As he spoke, he walked slowly around her paralyzed body. Frightened, she tried to follow him with her eyes, but her head would not turn. “So afraid,” he murmured. “Yet I should be the one who should be scared. You shot first. You speak of the Order as if it were barbaric. And yet, it is I who was forced to defend myself against you.”
Having circled her, he moved even closer, peering into her face, her eyes. Then the red lightsaber he held came up: close to her flesh, close enough to cast a red glow on her skin. “Something.” He sounded mystified. “There is something…Who are you?”
伦觉察到蕾伊身上有某种特质，并且开始怀疑蕾伊的真实身份并不简单。这一重要信息在电影版中被删略了。
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Shutting down and belting his lightsaber, Ren contemplated his immobile captive. Reaching up slowly, he touched her face. The pressure he applied was not physical. Refusing to meet his gaze, she looked away, straining with the agony of resistance, hardly daring to breathe. If only she could get a hand free, a leg—but no part of her body responded to her commands.
Surprised by what he was finding, Ren lowered his hand. Relieved of the mental intrusion, she sucked in great, long draughts of air. His brows drew together and a reluctance to believe his own findings colored his comments.
“Is it true, then? You’re nothing special after all? You’re just a—Jakku scavenger?”
How did he know that? she agonized as she stared back at him. Surely she hadn’t thought it! She’d tried to keep her mind blank, her memory locked, and still he had wormed his way in. He touched her anew. This time the pain of trying to stave him off brought tears streaming down her face. He was within her mind and her thoughts, and there was nothing—nothing!—she could do to keep him out. To resist. But she kept trying, trying…
小说中蕾伊对伦的精神抵制远比电影中困难。
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“General, while I have already completed a preliminary analysis, I’ll inform you of my final determination only when I have finished comparing the information available in this map to that in our full database. There. I’ve finished. Unfortunately, I have to conclude that this map contains insufficient data with which to make a match to any system in our records.”
抵抗组织得到BB-8携带的地图后，C-3PO分析得出结论，说地图里的信息不足，无法与抵抗组织数据库中的任何已知星系进行匹配。
然而这与第31条中汉对地图的识别是矛盾的：
One finger traced the outlines of a particularly bright and well-known nebular cluster. Like everything else in the map, it was brilliantly depicted. It was also only half there.
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Leia ignored him. “What a fool I was to think we could just find Luke and bring him back.”
He moved toward her. “Leia…”
She growled at him. “Don’t do that.”
It stopped him cold. “Do what?”
Her voice was flat. “Be nice to me.”Whirling, she stomped off. More than a little bewildered, he followed. Though he caught up to her easily, she didn’t stop, nor did she look in his direction.
“Hey, I’m here to help,” he told her.
She continued to march forward, her gaze set straight ahead. “When did that ever help? And don’t say the Death Star.”
莱娅说“Don’t do that.”，汉问“Do what?”，电影中莱娅的回答是“Anything”，而小说中莱娅的回答是“Be nice to me.”（不要对我这么好）。比电影中的回复明确，但是与下文在死星帮上忙并不衔接。
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He met her eyes steadily. “We’ve lost our son, forever.”
Leia bit her lower lip, refusing to concede. “No. It was Snoke.”
Han drew back slightly.
“Snoke?”
She nodded. “He knew our child would be strong with the Force. That he was born with equal potential for good or evil.”
“You knew this from the beginning? Why didn’t you tell me?”
She sighed. “Many reasons. I was hoping that I was wrong, that it wasn’t true. I hoped I could sway him, turn him away from the dark side, without having to involve you.” A small smile appeared. “You had—you have—wonderful qualities, Han, but patience and understanding were never among them. I was afraid that your reactions would only drive him farther to the dark side. I thought I could shield him from Snoke’s influence and you from
what was happening.” Her voice dropped. “It’s clear now that I was wrong. Whether your involvement would have made a difference, we’ll never know.”
He had trouble believing what he was hearing. “So Snoke was watching our son.”
“Always,” she told him. “From the shadows, in the beginning, even before I realized what was happening, he was manipulating everything, pulling our son toward the dark side.
小说中汉表现得不知道斯诺克与本的关系，这与他下文在本面前誓言旦旦说是斯诺克骗了本前后矛盾。而且莱娅对汉一直隐瞒实情的理由居然是害怕汉会把儿子推向黑暗面，这个理由实在是牵强得有点过分。难道本是从他妈那里继承了智商吗？
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“Is it true?” he finally asked. “You’re just a scavenger?” She didn’t respond,and, perhaps sensing her embarrassment, he changed the subject. “Tell me about the droid.”
She swallowed. “It’s a BB unit with a selenium drive and a thermal hyperscan vindicator, internal self-correcting gyroscopic propulsion system, optics corrected to—”
“I am familiar with general droid technical specifications. I don’t need to acquire one: What I want is located in its memory. It’s carrying a section of a transgalactic navigational chart. We have the rest, recovered from the archives of the Empire. We need the last piece. Somehow, you convinced the droid to showit to you. You. A simple, solitary scavenger. How is that?”
本·索罗已经把机器人丢在塔科达纳，很可能已经被抵抗组织救走了。现在问BB-8难道不是太晚了点吗？如果不是在向观众们解释帝国已经掌握了另一半地图，那就是在没话找话强行撩妹了。
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She knew that trying to resist him physically would not only be useless but would likely result in unpleasantness of a kind she preferred not to imagine. So she remained motionless and silent, her arms at her sides, as his hand rose toward her face. He touched her again, as he had in the forest on Takodana.
And hesitated. What was that? Something there. Something unexpected.
伦在蕾伊头脑中发现一个意料之外的东西。
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As she strained to resist the probe, he pushed into her, brushing aside her awkward attempts to keep him out. While he investigated her mind, he spoke softly.
“You’ve been so lonely,” he murmured as he searched for what he needed. “So afraid to leave.” A thin smile crossed his face. “At night, desperate to sleep, you’d imagine an ocean. I can see it…I can see the island.”
Tears were streaming down her face from the effort she was making to withstand him. Increasingly desperate, she did try to strike out. But just as on Takodana, her body refused to respond.
伦一开始的精神侵入进行得很顺利。蕾伊完全无力抵挡。
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Narrowing his gaze and his focus, he locked eyes with her. She met his stare without trying to look away. She should have looked away. It would have been the rational thing to do. The sane thing to do. Instead, she just glared, trying not to flinch, not to blink. Ah, he thought to himself. Something there, of interest. Not the image of the map. That would take another moment. But definitely something worth investigating. He shifted his perception toward it, seeking to identify, to analyze, to— The barrier he encountered stopped him cold. And it was he, Kylo Ren, who blinked. It made no sense. He pushed, hard, with his mind—and the probe went nowhere. A look of amazement replaced the fear on Rey’s face as she discovered herself inside his mind. Stunned at the realization, she found herself inexorably drawn to—to…
"You,” she heard herself saying clearly, “you’re afraid. That you will never be as strong as—Darth Vader!”
伦暂时不管地图，继续刺探蕾伊脑中某个让他好奇的东西，结果触到了某种记忆禁区。这个禁区看起来是由一个原力技能远胜于蕾伊和伦的人建立的，否则就是蕾伊在被激怒的情况下开挂自己建立的。伦在此时受挫，开始动摇，结果被蕾伊趁势反制。
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There was as much curiosity in Supreme Leader Snoke’s voice as there was disappointment.
This scavenger—this girl—resisted you?”
“That’s all she is, yes. A scavenger from that inconsequential Jakku. Completely untrained, but strong with the Force. Stronger than she knows.” His mask off, Ren replied with what seemed to be his usual assurance. No one else would have sensed a difference. Snoke did.
The Supreme Leader’s voice was flat.“You have compassion for her.”
“No—never. Compassion? For an enemy of the Order?”
这关系有点乱…芬、波、丘、伦都喜欢蕾伊，五角恋……
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Though visibly angry, Snoke’s tone remained unchanged. “Have we located the main Resistance base?”
Hux was clearly gratified to be the bearer of good news. “We were able to track their reconnaissance ship back to the Ileenium system. We are coordinating with our own reconnaissance craft in the area in order to lock down the specific location of their base.”
Snoke replied with cold satisfaction. “We do not need it. Prepare the weapon. Destroy their system.”
Collected and composed as he was, Hux was not immune to surprise. “The system? Supreme Leader, according to themost recent galographics, at least two and possibly three habitable worlds circle Ileenium. Following the destruction of the Hosnian worlds, would it not be worthwhile simply to destroy their base and claim the remainder for the Order? We will have the location of the base within a matter of hours and—”
Snoke cut him off. “We cannot wait.Not even for hours. Hours that may permit as little as one ship to depart with the information that will allow them to find Skywalker. That would be one ship too many. The more time we give them, the more likely the chance, however slight, that they will find Skywalker and convince him to return to challenge our power. As soon as the weapon is fully charged, I want the entire Ileenium system destroyed.”
Daring to disagree, Ren took a step forward. “No—Supreme Leader, I can get the map from the girl, and that will be the end of it. I just need your guidance.”
“And you promised me when it came to destroying the Resistance you wouldn’t fail me.” The threatening figure of Snoke leaned toward Ren. “Who knows if copies of the map have already been made and sent out of the system, to other, minor Resistance outposts? But those who are most aware of its significance will all likely be gathered at their main base. Destroy that, destroy them, and we may at least feel a little more confident that the way to Skywalker is eradicated. Even if copies have been made and exported, the annihilation of their leadership will give pause to any survivors who might dare to contemplate further resistance to us.” He sat back. “For that reason alone I would order the destruction of the system, even if there was no assurance it would also put an end to this accursed map.” He turned to Hux.
“General, prepare the weapon. With the same efficiency you have already demonstrated.”
“Yes, Supreme Leader!”
Buoyed by the praise, Hux turned and strode quickly out of the hall. That left Snoke to fix his eyes on its sole remaining occupant.
“Kylo Ren. It appears that a reminder is in order. So I will show you the dark side. Bring the girl to me.”
斯诺克执意使用弑星者基地炸掉抵抗组织的整个星系。理由是一刻也不能耽搁，必须尽快消灭所有可能知晓天行者下落的人。（凯洛·伦是捅了个多大的篓子。）
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Finn, careful with those dentons. They’re explosives.”
Halting, Finn gaped at the load he was carrying. “They are?” He faltered. “Why didn’t you tell me?”
“Didn’t want to make you nervous,”Han replied.
电影版减少了对芬的嘲讽感，也去掉了汉的回答，更简洁自然。
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He turned reflective. “It wasn’t all bad, was it? I know we argued a lot.” He smiled affectionately. “Maybe it’s because we both have such shy, retiring personalities. Of course, if you’d only done what I said…”
“And you’d only done what I asked,”she riposted, still smiling.
这段对话揭示了两人婚姻悲剧的原因之一。这段在电影中未表现，虽说不是必须，但也颇有些可惜了。
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“Some things never change.”
“Yep.” She glanced downward, remembering, then met his gaze once more. “You still drive me crazy.”
“Crazy as in crazy good, or crazy as in borderline insane?”
“Probably a little of both,” she admitted.
这里的crazy是个双关，电影里没有明说，但是暗示得也相当明显了。
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She managed a slight shake of her head. “Even a Wookiee can’t crush First Order armor.” In response, Chewbacca tightened his grip further. Her mask emitted a slight but perceptible wheeze.
法斯马身为冲锋队大队长，在电影中乖乖缴枪，并积极配合敌人降下弑星者基地护盾。在小说里，法斯马尝试进行了几次抵抗。这是第一次不成功的反抗。
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“Or,” Finn added, pushing the muzzle of the blaster in a little tighter, “I can simply shoot you. I’m well trained, you know. I know exactly where to put a kill shot. Especially at this range.”
芬真是忘恩负义叛徒狗，《觉醒之前》小说里法斯马相当器重芬，还替他隐瞒抗命的案底。结果芬就这么恩将仇报。
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“What are you up to here?” she countered. “Are you with the Resistance? Independents?”
法斯马的话透露出，FO境内的暴政也引发了部分统治区的独立运动。
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Taking a seat before the main console, Phasma paused. What was happening right now made no sense. Still, with her chest and shoulders throbbing from the Wookiee’s attention, she was not about to offer what would amount to pointless resistance. The fools presently holding their weapons on her would meet their inevitable fate soon enough. She felt something hard push against the side of her helmet.
法斯马完全没搞清状况。
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The stormtrooper captain sat back. “I can’t do this by myself. It requires two security codes to access the full system and shut it down.”
“I’ve been in the business of dealing with liars and thieves my whole life. I know when someone’s telling the truth—and when they’re not.” Pressing the end of his blaster against one side of Phasma’s helmet, Han lowered his voice. “How well can you hear with one ear?”
大队长第二次失败的反抗。有一件事可以确定。法斯马头盔内并没有内置指挥通讯系统。（呸
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Nearly colliding with an oncoming TIE fighter, Poe let fly at another with the full force of his ship’s weapons systems.
“Cover for each other! There’s a lot of ’em, but that just means more targets. Don’t let these thugs scare you!”
波的迷之自信。Don’t let these thugs scare you!这句稍微不那么脑残的豪言壮语在电影中被改到了塔科达纳空战前。
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Han turned to Finn, his expression solemn. But his tone was the same as always: ready for anything. He gestured toward Chewbacca. “My friend here has a bag full of explosives that we didn’t use inside. Be a shame to make him haul them all the way back to the Falcon.” The Wookiee added acurt grunt of agreement. “What’s the best place we could put ’em to use?”
电影中被精简成：My friend here has a bag full of explosives. Let's use them.
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“The oscillator is the only sensible target,” Finn told him. “But there’s no way to get inside.” “There is a way.” Everyone turned toward Rey. It was Chewie who ventured the question that had to be asked. “I’ve seen inside these kinds of walls,” she told them as the sky overhead continued to rain destruction. “The mechanics and instrumentation are the same as the Star Destroyers I’ve spent years inside salvaging. Get me to a conventional junction station, I can get us in.” Han nodded and smiled at her. “Getus in. If you can do that, we’ll be ready.”
这一段解释了汉和蕾会兵分两路。在最终版台本中被删除。
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“Let’s plant ’em at every other support column we can find,” Han suggested. When Chewie responded with a series of emphatic moans, Han reconsidered.
"You’re right. Better idea.” He indicated the nearest of the building’s massive support structures. “We don’t have the kind of munitions necessary to bring down more than one. I only hope we brought enough to do that much.” He gestured. “We’ll put everything we’ve got on that one column. You take the top. I’ll go below. We’ll meet back here.”
汉一开始要在每个支柱处安放一枚炸弹，从他对丘巴卡建议的反应来看，可知丘巴卡建议把炸弹集中安置在一根支柱上。此处解释了电影中没有细说的地方，即丘巴卡究竟建议了什么。因为毛猴子不说人话，所以只能通过汉的回话来猜他说了什么。删掉汉的答复以后，电影观众就只能从爆炸的结果来猜了，但是大部分观众估计都没有注意到这个细节。
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"They’re here. Find them. Up there.” The squad immediately went into action, moving off rapidly in the direction he had indicated. Once they were out of sight, Ren turned slowly—and headed downward.
这个细节说明凯洛·伦已经感受到汉的位置，故意把士兵们支开去搜查错误的地方。（联系到前面汉与丘的分工，丘上，汉下）
的确，凯洛·伦并不清楚汉的具体方位，但是他能感觉到大致的方向，而且希望亲手处置他。
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Rising from his hiding place, Han looked back the way he had come. If he left now and managed to control his thoughts and emotions while retracing his steps, there was a good chance he could make it out of the building. If he was really lucky, he would be able to slip outside without drawing the attention of any searching stormtroopers—or anyone else. Outside, if all had gone according to the hastily drawn-up plan, Finn and Rey would be waiting with transportation. A chance, then, to make it back to the Falcon before everything on this planet went to hell. A chance later for another reunion, on another world. A face swam before his, its features aged but still soft, the voice that emerged from between so-familiar lips biting yet always affectionate. Forming words that lingered in his thoughts. Forming, at last hearing, a request.
A request that wouldn’t go away, he knew. It would never go away. He made up his mind. Instead of retreating, he advanced. Instead of running for safety, he took up the challenge. There was no real choice, he told himself as he advanced to the edge of the walkway. And called out.
“Ben!”
在思想斗争之后，汉的决定成就了自己的悲剧，也成就了凯洛·伦的悲剧。因为凯洛·伦向黑暗滑的越深，也越痛苦。
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Reaching up, he slowly removed the mask. For the first time Han saw the face of his son as a grown man—and it jolted him.
汉和本已经多年未见。本离家出走的时候，还是个少年。
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Ren’s eyes blazed. “No! The Supreme Leader is wise. He knows me for who I am, and who I can become. He knows you for what you really are, Han Solo. Not a general, not a hero. Just a small-time thief and smuggler.”
电影中剪掉了第二句和之后的部分，变得语义不明，前后不接。
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Accepting without quite believing, Han stared back into the face of the creature that had been his son. There was nothing to see there. Only darkness in the shape of a face: alien, unthinking, unfeeling. His knees buckled, the beam tilting down with him as he crumpled. Ren extinguished it. For another moment Han held on to the edge of the walkway. A rush of memories flashed through his mind: worlds and time, friends and enemies, triumphs and failures. Words he wished he had spoken and others he regretted.
虐。汉的临终遗念。
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Stunned by his own action, Kylo Ren fell to his knees. Following through on the act ought to have made him stronger, a part of him believed. Instead, he found himself weakened. He did not hear the roar of the enraged Wookiee above, but he did feel the sting of the shot from the bowcaster as it slammed into his side, knocking him back on the walkway.
反映了凯洛·伦弑父后的状态，与电影略有不同。电影并没有表现出他的消沉失落。
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Led by the black fighter and ignoring both pursuing TIE fighters and arcing seekers, the remaining X-wings broke off from defensive combat and dove as one toward the hexagon. A few strikes missed,detonating harmlessly against the still-intact sides of the building. But the others, most, hit their mark. As Poe and his comrades pulled up and away, one detonation after another shook the great edifice. Gradually, almost in slow motion, it began to collapse, the walls falling in upon themselves. More significantly, gouts of flame began to erupt from below, rising from unseen chambers far underground.
电影增加了难度，波最后飞进裂缝从内部攻击才摧毁了振荡器。这次不能怪FO太轻敌了，绝对是叛军赤裸裸地开挂。
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“All teams, nice job!” Poe said to his fellow pilots. “General, the target’s been destroyed!”
Leia’s warm voice filled his ears, but the message she delivered was an unexpected one. “Good—now retreat immediately! The planet could be unstable. Get out of there now.”
Even with the relay in place, it took a moment for the message to be received. Poe didn’t hesitate to reply. “If we retreat, we leave our friends behind!”
Having anticipated Poe’s response, Leia was ready with her own. “Poe, outside of those of us here, your group is all that remains of the Resistance that’s capable of putting up a fight. If you stay to find them, we lose you all.”
“General, with all due respect,” he said evenly, “we’re not leaving our friends behind. Teams, who’s with me?”
振荡器被炸毁后，莱娅下令让波立即撤退，波说不能丢下地面小分队，莱娅的回答是：你的战斗机部队是抵抗组织唯一的战斗力量，你不能去找他们，我们冒不起这个险。
莱娅之前通过原力感应知道汉已经死了，但下令抛弃丘巴卡、蕾伊和芬恩，也的确是个冷漠的将领。
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Finn started toward her, but the sound of Ren’s lightsaber igniting made him turn. In the darkness, the hum and glow of the gleaming red weapon was mesmerizing. With nothing else to fall back on and unable to reach Rey’s blaster, Finn resorted to the only defense at his command: He pulled and activated the Skywalker lightsaber. For some reason, the sight of it was enough to give Ren pause. He stared at it for a moment before reacting.
伦没想到会看见卢克大神的光剑，简直惊呆了！
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Advancing relentlessly, he was driven by something that Finn could not even sense, far less counter. Still the ex-trooper fought back, until Ren landed a blow that cut across Finn’s chest and sent the lightsaber flying from his hand. It landed in the snow six meters distant.
小说里芬恩的伤是开胸，不是断背。
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Taken aback, he whirled—to see the weapon land in the hand of a girl standing by a tree.
Rey appeared equally shocked that her reach for the device had exceeded his. She gazed down at the weapon now resting in her grip.
“It is you,” Ren murmured.
His words unsettled her: Not for the first time, he seemed to know more about her than she did about herself. But she had no time to ponder his comment, nor was she inclined to do so anyway; she was too consumed with rage. Holding the haft of the lightsaber in both hands, she ignited the beam—and charged.
蕾伊隔空夺走卢克的光剑后，凯洛·伦说：果然是你。蕾伊意识到凯洛·伦似乎比自己更熟悉自己的身世。那么问题来了，凯洛·伦到底知道多少蕾伊的身世？请看下集。
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Furious as he was, Snoke knew there was nothing he could do. So many plans so carefully laid, so many intentions that must now go unfulfilled… “You will leave Starkiller at once and come to me with Kylo Ren. Leave immediately.” He added grimly, “It appears that he may have been right about the girl.”
电影中删除了斯诺克的第二句台词。看来第八部电影，斯诺克的目标将是蕾伊。
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For a while she actually drove him backward, until he regained his self-assurance and in turn pressed her. The fight continued to shift back and forth; first he gained the advantage, then an enraged Rey took it back.
双方实力描写有了有趣的差别。也许是为了使蕾伊原力觉醒更有戏剧性，电影削弱了蕾伊的攻势，也淡化了蕾伊愤怒的情绪。
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"No. You need a teacher.” He was beseeching and insistent all at once. “I can show you the ways of the Force!”
Slowly she shook her head. “The Force?” That was what this was about? Instead of moving to defend herself, Rey closed her eyes. Ren hesitated, confused by her actions. A long moment passed, in which Ren sensed a change in the air, a change in her. Then she opened her eyes and attacked, viciously, in a way she didn’t know she was capable of, striking again and again as Ren was slowly driven back.The flaring energy from the interacting lightsabers was more pronounced than ever in the flurry of her attack. And—Ren went down.
蕾伊在小说里使用的是凶狠的黑暗原力…电影里则是平静的光明面。
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He was up again in an instant, but not in time to fully deflect a following blow from Rey’s weapon. He succeeded in blocking it, but he still took the full force of the strike against the haft of his own lightsaber. The weapon went flying into the snow. Unarmed, he raised a hand and utilized the Force to fend off one slashing blow after another, until finally her fury penetrated his remaining defenses. Taking a glancing blow to the head and chest, he went down, a prominent burn slashed across his face. Weakened, he reached out toward his lightsaber, trying to draw it to him.
凯洛·伦的光剑被打飞后，用原力徒手挡剑…这开挂的武力值，电影中删了有点可惜。
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One downward cut, she saw. One quick, final strike, and she could kill him. The landing lights of a shuttle appeared in the distance, coming over the trees in her direction. She had to make a decision, now. Kill him, a voice inside her head said. It was amorphous, unidentifiable, raw. Pure vengeful emotion. So easy, she told herself. So quick. She recoiled from it. From the dark side.
小说明确指出蕾伊使用了黑暗原力，并且收到了诱惑。电影弱化了，把蕾伊变成了一个较单一化的角色。这个简单化的设定，应该是为了照顾新观众。
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The world shook beneath her as the ground began to split. Turning away from the injured figure, she ran back to where Finn lay badly wounded. A deep gully formed, separating her from General Hux and the arriving troopers. Utilizing the tiny position sensor emplaced in Ren’s belt, Hux had tracked him to this spot.
赫克斯奉斯诺克之命赶到，救走了凯洛·伦。
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He would have taken Rey and Finn, as well, if not for the command that had been issued by the Supreme Leader. That took precedence over everything. There was simply no time left.
The two renegades were going to die here anyway, he told himself as he followed the troopers carrying Ren into the nearby shuttle. As soon as he was aboard, it lifted off, its occupants desperate to flee the dying planet.
赫克斯没有趁机杀死蕾伊和芬恩，心里想他们反正活不了。这段果然还是删了好，不然又多了一个槽点。
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“Kylo Ren said that the segment held by Beebee-Ate is the last piece of the map that shows the way to Skywalker’s location. So, where’s the rest of it?”
“The First Order has it.” Rey looked over at him. “They extracted it from the Imperial archives.”
Poe stared at her. “The Empire?”
Admiral Statura nodded in agreement.“It makes sense. The Empire would have been looking for the first Jedi temples. In destroying all the Jedi sanctuaries they would have acquired a great deal of peripheral information.”
背景历史。帝国成立后，不停地寻找并摧毁早期绝地圣殿，在这个过程中，得到了一些不完整的地图资料。这解释了为什么帝国会掌握绝地圣殿方位的部分星图，跟电影开头连贯起来看，洛尔·桑·特卡为首的古代原力教派看来是为了不让帝国摧毁第一座圣殿，而一直保存着最后一份地图。电影中为了照顾节奏省略了这段，这样就漏了一点背景信息，不过从节奏来讲，处理得不错。
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"Yeah, buddy, hold on,” Poe told him. “I have it.”
Moving to the side of the spherical droid, the pilot removed from a sealed compartment in his clothing the tiny and very old data device he had originally received from Lor San Tekka.
波一直把地图放在自己衣服口袋里？波带队袭击弑星者基地的时候，为什么要带着地图呢？这似乎是一处严重的bug。电影中波是从指挥室的控制台里取出地图存储装置的。
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Cheers and spontaneous embraces filled the room with so much joy that no one paid any attention to who was hugging what representative of whichever species. Rey and Poe were not excluded, though their sudden, tight clinch of shared excitement led to a moment of mutual awkwardness.
“Uh, hi,” the pilot mumbled. “I’m Poe.”
She nodded slowly, searching his face and finding that she liked it. “I recognize the name. So you’re Poe. Poe Dameron, the X-wing pilot. I’m Rey.”
“I know.” He smiled back, a little more at ease. “Nice to meet you.”
大家都为找到地图而欢呼的时候，波和蕾伊暧昧的拥抱和对话。《原力觉醒》小说是不是有点太玛丽苏了？不过这三角恋倒是完美复制了正传三部曲，哦，等等，我忘了斯诺克说过凯洛·伦have compassion for her，也忘了汉说过丘巴卡也喜欢蕾伊……难道所有雄性角色都喜欢上蕾伊了吗？
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“I’m proud of what you’re about to do,” she told the girl.
Rey replied in all seriousness. “But you’re also afraid. In sending me away, you’re—reminded.”
Leia straightened. “You won’t share the fate of our son.”
“I know what we’re doing is right. This is how it has to be. This is how it should be.”
Leia smiled gently, reassuringly. “I know it, too. May the Force be with you.”
蕾伊感觉到莱娅其实害怕送走自己，就像送走本·索罗一样。这似乎再次提醒读者蕾伊有黑暗面的危险。电影中都删略了，留下像一张白纸一样的无知少女。
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Sitting down, she settled in. She could do this. If Chewbacca felt she could do it, then who was she to dispute him? As she hesitated, the Wookiee reached over and mussed her hair. Grinning, she made a show of trying to slap his hand away. He had no idea how much this innocent, familial gesture meant to her. Behind them, R2-D2 beeped happily.
丘巴卡主动坐在副驾驶位，把主驾驶位留给蕾伊。蕾伊坐下之后，丘巴卡摸了摸她的头发。摸头啥意思？汉说过丘巴卡喜欢蕾伊……再回想起电影中丘巴卡几次侧头斜眼看蕾伊的样子，汉不会真的是说丘巴卡真的喜欢蕾伊吧！
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